The goal I had for framing was to be able to introduce my quotes in a smooth, transitional way and be able to connect it to my claim in the previous paragraph as well as the claim in the current paragraph. The steps I used for reaching this goal was coming up with the claim of each paragraph, or all the main points beforehand and then putting them in an appropriate order so they could relate to each other. Then, another thing I would do to help framing is to make sure I gave an analysis in depth of what was just said. I did this by giving a different perspective of the sources so that people who haven’t read it before would be able to understand. I tried to write my paper and also see it as a reader who had never heard much about the topic so I could explain not only what the sources were saying, but why they were significant. The last goal that I tried to reach and didn’t even realize was used so often in my paper, was taking out the wordy sentences and removing things like “this” or “these” so the sentence sounded more put together. I did thing by speaking my final draft out loud and getting rid of the things that didn’t seem like I would say if I was talking or explaining to someone in person. I think I reached these goals in this paragraph:
“The less one makes legitimate relationships, the more that they become forced, which can lead to unhappiness. It seems to make us less secure in our relationships we do have face to face. Although some people may disagree and say that social networking is actually opening us up to more conversations and connections, I believe face to face interactions give us a more interpersonal look at someone’s tone, body language and sense of connection. Why is this important? Well, you are more likely to misinterpret something someone said when it is sent in a direct message online rather than face to face, which can lead to more confusion and les understanding of what a person’s point is. According to a study that was done by Robert Waldinger, he concluded “The second big lesson that we learned is that it’s not just the number of friends you have, and it’s not whether or not you’re in a committed relationship, but it’s the quality of your close relationships that matters.” (TED, Waldinger). In other words, Waldinger is explaining that it is not the amount of relationships you have, but how close united you are with the person, or how much effort is put into the relationship. I do agree that some tight knit relationships can be found through social media, but I also believe you can’t have a one on one experience and get to understand how the other person acts or feels towards you without meeting them in person. Someone’s intentions are much harder to realize online than in person.”
